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| I enjoyed the first chapter. Very intriguing! There's some nice description, too. I'd suggest avoiding using too many italics to stress words. A reader will understand what you are trying to say and it interrupted my flow almost every time. Just use them when they're really important. |
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Comments for: First chapter Posted By: Sillow Posted Date: 2009-05-17 |
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| I love it so far, this is a very talented writer, i would love to see some more of their work |
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Comments for: First chapter Posted By: 5Stevens9M4 Posted Date: 2008-05-23 |
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| So far this is one of the best young adult fantasy books that I have read in a long time. Looking forward for the rest of the book |
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Comments for: First chapter Posted By: Tvellucci731 Posted Date: 2008-05-23 |
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| A fantastic piece of writing, a real page turner from start to finish! |
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Comments for: Full book Posted By: aechase Posted Date: 2008-05-12 |
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| Love the opening scene, gives me a nice idea of what is to come. |
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Comments for: First chapter Posted By: aris-julian Posted Date: 2008-05-12 |
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| Solid teen/fantasy read. Best of luck. |
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Comments for: First chapter Posted By: Greebosears Posted Date: 2008-05-09 |
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| Surprise!! This book just kept getting better and better. 1st chapter was the weakest, not strongest. Overall a superior work. |
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Comments for: Full book Posted By: aalaric Posted Date: 2008-04-06 |
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| So far so good. Nice read |
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Comments for: First chapter Posted By: ondabay Posted Date: 2008-03-20 |
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| Great story idea and a good hook. The author does a great job of bringing Gabryela to life, though I would like to know more about her father and the setting. |
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Comments for: First chapter Posted By: Chrissy Posted Date: 2008-03-20 |
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| Well done. Can't wait to get to the rest of the book |
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Comments for: First chapter Posted By: aalaric Posted Date: 2008-03-17 |
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| Well written but needs some more spacing. Its crammed together and hard to read. |
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Comments for: First chapter Posted By: Mongoose Posted Date: 2008-03-16 |
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